On a dark night when the owls are hooting and the trees are swishing from side to side. Ruby was pulling up a bucket from a well.
Ruby looked at moon but when she looked again, it was gone.
The Moon-creature was watching Ruby and she looked back and she saw it and she screamed in horror.
The Moon ran away in fright and hid in the trees then poked up and the light shone on the ground. It looked like skeleton’s hands poking out from ground.
The Moon stood up behind the gloomy trees and then he sneezed lunar dust and it look like floating stars around Ruby's head.
Ruby looked up and she saw the creature zooming to her and it had got some fences and it look like dagley charms. Then he picked her up in his spreckley fingers and he pulled out Ruby’s bucket.
The creature flew up. When Ruby looked in the bucket she saw his reflection. At night she remembered him as a friend and she said ‘See you tomorrow’.
Wow James,
ReplyDeleteI really like the way you have written such a long story. You have even added some paragraphs. Next time try to use different sentence starts.
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Hi James thats a great story but don't keep saying her name, Rubi. But you've got 6 paragraphs!
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Hi James great story you've got 6 paragraphs! But don't keep saying the person's name all the time.
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Hi James.
ReplyDeleteWhat a good gob.I like how you pot full stop's and capitals.
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Nice use of sounds in the start of this story James.
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